Week #28 5W

There’s silence, the flock scatters, animals hide away. The forest has never been so still. It’s howls echo in the cave and as I creep closer to get a better view, there are growls. Mother wolf is trying to guard her injured pup as it let out a pitiful howl. I peered around the wolf’s broad shoulders to see a poor pup suffering from a splinter in its swollen paw. I had to help the pup but its mother was so protective and vicious, there seemed to be no way.

 I didn’t know if I’d ever reach the needy pup.

– Natalie 

4 thoughts on “Week #28 5W”

  1. Good Job Natalie I love the detail in your text it really hooks the reader keep up the great work byeeee

  2. To Natalie

    That was a great writing piece ☺︎︎. I like how you used lots of adjectives, it gave me an idea of what the scene of the writing would look like. Your last sentence, it leaves me thinking what will happen next.

    – Savannah

  3. I really liked your piece of writing and the great way you described the forest in the first three lines.
    Next time I wonder if you can use higher tier words
    E.g:
    One of the times you could of used higher tier words is when you were talking about the vicious mother protecting the younger wolf.
    Other than that it was great
    -Ryder

  4. Natalie,
    The narrator is so kind and brave. You have left us on a cliff-hanger. Keep writing.
    Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA.

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