Week #46

It was a summer like no other; traces of snow everywhere. One night I went out on a journey to find the source. While I was trampling through the snow I felt something behind me. Terrified, I cautiously turned around. I gasped there was a tall long bony figure standing there.I could look straight through him but then he walked away leaving a passage of snow behind him. I found the source of the snow! I went to take a photo to get proof of his existence but when I looked behind me I could not find him. He was gone forever.

– Will

Captains log, day 13, time… unknown. I’ve been floating around in space for ten years and still no sight of that minuscule blue creature. My food supply is low and so is my water source. I want to return back home but if I don’t go on, the world might end. I was just about to head to another galaxy but when I looked behind me I spotted a blur of blue. My heart raced as I put on my spacesuit and opened the airlock. I pushed off with all my might out of my rocket and into the dark cold space…

– Thomas

It was the kind of night that even rainclouds needed umbrellas, as footsteps creaked on the uneven floorboards. I didn’t want to, but I had to. Ever so slowly, I creeped into the backyard. I had it. I knew I had the disease.

Sleepwalking once isn’t a disease, but doing it every day at every hour is. I opened the gate that led to the creek and then… Mud was everywhere. On my sleeves, my face, everywhere. I knew that I was in danger, because it was here. I heard a noise. Creeaaakkk… but when I looked behind me… nothing. Nothing was there. Because it was on me…

– Hilda

6 thoughts on “Week #46”

  1. I like how Thomas described the small creature, but left the reading wondering as he only used ‘minuscule’.

    I also like how Hilda used her imagination with the theme, who would’ve thought of sleepwalking?

    I like the description Will used. He described the setting, character and emotions.

    Well done everyone!

  2. I loved how all of you built the suspense in your stories
    Will, i loved how you said “he was gone forever” it made me feel like i was a detective trying to find out where he went
    Hilda, i enjoyed your introduction and it made me wonder what will happen next
    Thomas, i really loved how you started off with telling your audience that you were writing down your characters thoughts.
    Job well done guys! You all deserve to win!

  3. Kia ora team.
    What excellent writing from these three students. I am going to recommend Thomas for the Week #46 Showcase, as he has done some really great description, using a range of sentence lengths and vocabulary. Keep practising your writing team, as you have got some awesome skills there.
    If you have time, come along and visit our class blog at https://rakau19.edublogs.org/ = we’d love to see you.
    Ms M #100WC

    1. Thank you for your feedback and recommending Thomas’ writing for the showcase. He is super excited!
      We look forward to reading some of your students’ writing on your blog too.

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